No mistakes, Ellis.
Don’t give ‘em a break, Ellis
Whoosh! I’m blown by,
Swoosh, next thing I hear.
Then yelling in my ear,
Shaking my head
I was just scared.
Was it fear?
No. he just beat me
Me? No I’m crazy.
Or am I?
He did. He just did.
Forget it.
Come back, Ellis
Stay on track, Ellis.
This is the game
And now it’s time claim
It.
Ellis, this poem was filled with poetic devices that made it so fun to read. The way you used third person made it unique. Using "Forget It" standing alone created a great transition between you getting beat and you coming back.
ReplyDeleteThis poem drew my attention from the beginning! It was very well written with a lot of poetic devices to keep you reading. The way you broke up your lines made it to where you couldn't finish without reading on to something else that caught your attention. I like the way you almost took two things that could have been separate and put them together making one part you being beat and then the other you coming back. It made you want to see what the outcome was. Good job on this!
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